Hi there! It's Asiya and today I've prepared
for you a full IELTS Academic Writing
Task 1 essay. You'll see the full sample
answer and I'll tell you how this sample
meets requirements that IELTS examiners
use to mark your essays. For this video
I've selected a task with 2 charts of
different types, which was reported on
one of the recent exams. It is a
common type of task today. While you're
watching this video think if you'd like
to learn how to write essays like this
yourself and I'll tell you how you can
do it. I've also prepared a PDF file with
the sample answer for you to download
and I have a similar video with a full
task 2 sample. I'm gonna give you all the
links. One more thing
I'm gonna say before we start. I want to
be honest with you it took me more than
20 minutes to write this essay, perfect
the language, polish it, have it proofread
(oh yes I have a professional
proofreader native speaker
check all my essays, all my slides
because I want to be sure there are no
mistakes no typos and you can trust my
materials)
So this essay fulfills all the
requirements for a Band 9 score
so it's an inspiration a sample essays I
write in 20 minutes are simpler but I use
exactly the same technique I must say I
put all my efforts into making of this
video and I really hope you're gonna
like it if you do please put a like and
now let's get started
here is our task the bar chart below
shows US seafood imports in 1986 96 and
2016 and the forecast for 2026 the pie
chart shows the geographical structure
of these inports in 2016
summarize the information by selecting
and reporting the main features and make
comparisons were relevant write at least
150 words and we have two charts in the
past most tasks contained only one chart
but today it's super common to get two
or even three charts the bar chart shows
Seafood inports in three time periods in
the past and the forecast when you see a
date in the future it's always a
forecast the pie chart shows which
countries import seafood in the USA in
2016 what you can see now is our essay
structure that's a classic task one
structure and the first paragraph is
your introduction that's where you need
to write one or two sentences
introducing the task basically you need
to tell the reader what information you
have in your charts quite often we
simply paraphrase the task and here is
my introduction the graphs provide
information on the volume of seafood
imports in the United States between the
years 1986 and 2016 with the prediction
for 2026 and demonstrate from which
countries the seafood was imported in
2016 let's compare it with the task the
task has two simple sentences I've
written one long sentence but I've
described information on both charts
instead of saying the bar chart shows or
the pie chart shows I used the graphs
provide information on instead of saying
US seafood imports I said the volume of
seafood imports in the United States I
repeated the words seafood imports and
I'm gonna use them throughout my essay
that's what this task is about and it's
okay to repeat those words don't force
paraphrasing instead of 1986 1996 and
2016 and the forecast for 2026 I wrote
between the years 1986 and 2016 with a
prediction for 2026
that was the description of the first
chart let's compare the description of
this second chart they task reads the
pie chart shows the geographical
structure of these imports in 2016
I wrote mm-hmm illustrate from which
countries the seafood was imported in
2016
I used the passive voice here if you use
different verb tenses and different
grammar structures you're going to get a
higher score for your grammar I also
have a separate video with more examples
of how to write an introduction and I'm
going to link it in the description box
below the second paragraph is an
overview write one or two sentences
summarizing what you've learned what is
the most important thing you've learned
what are the main trends concentrate on
the big picture and don't give any
details here quite often there are no
figures in an overview either here is
mine over Oh
seafood imports tripled over the 20-year
period with the top three countries
controlling
than two-thirds of the market in the
United States in the future however
input levels are focused to shrink if
you read the overview only you already
know what's going on right that's the
aim of writing and all of you let me
show you how I've done it so always
start with the word overall to show the
examiner that's my overview next seafood
imports tripled over the 20-year period
if you look at the first chart you see
that imports increased a lot between
1986 and 2016 from around 6 to 20
billion so I've calculated that it
tripled you can make simple calculations
it's a good way to illustrate your point
I've mentioned years in the introduction
so I'm not gonna repeat them here I just
say that 20 year period here is my
overview of the second chart with the
top three countries controlling more
than two-thirds of the market in the
United States I will name those
countries in my body paragraphs what I
want to say here is the top three
countries import most of the seafood and
again I've calculated it's 86% or 2/3
and the last bit and the future however
input levels are forecast to shrink this
is a reference to the focused on the
first chart and again I will give the
exact number in the body paragraphs here
I want to say the inputs will go down
and instead of using the word inputs
I used input levels it adds variety to
the vocabulary have a look at the
overview paragraph again I've summarized
all the information on both
chops that's important when should you
write your overview after the
introduction like me or at the end of
the essay after your body paragraphs
it's entirely up to you both are fine
just remember the overview is the most
important paragraph of yes a a you are
going to lose a lot of points if your
essay has no audio that's why I suggest
writing your overview after the
introduction when you still have time
ultimately it's up to you what do you
prefer
after the introduction or at the end
tell me in comments let's move on to the
body paragraphs right to body paragraphs
occasionally you may have three but in
most cases to never write only one body
paragraph to get been seven
you must logically organize information
it means you need to find a logical way
to split information into your body
paragraphs in this task it's easy I
described the first chart in body
paragraph 1 and the second chart in body
paragraph 2 and my body paragraph 1 is
of the u.s. seafood imports increased
from about six billion dollars in 1986
to over ten billion dollars in 1996 over
the following 10 years that amount
doubled and crossed the 20 billion mark
in 2016 despite the past growth it's
predicted that the trend will change and
in 2026 the United States will receive
approximately two billion dollars the
u.s. seafood products from abroad than
it did in 2016 here I've described the
first chart to get when salmon try to
show a wide range of vocabulary
very sentence structures and avoid
repeating words were possible for
example I named years in the first
sentence in 1986 and in 1996 in the next
sentence I simply wrote over the
following 10 years I've already
mentioned that it's okay to repeat words
seafood imports in an essay about
seafood imports but you should still use
alternatives when you can for example in
this paragraph I've written that amount
doubled
instead of saying seafood imports
doubled or the trend will change instead
of saying the imports will decrease in
general use words like an amount and
number a level a trend to avoid
repeating words like seafood inputs in
your essay I also used a linking phrase
despite the past growth to refer to the
previous sentence and tell the examiner
that something different is coming next
I often get a question how to use
linking words naturally and there's a
perfect example of how to do it here is
my body paragraph 2 in regard to the
geographical split of imports the three
countries of the dominative the market
in 2016 were China Thailand and Canada
which respectively imported 28% 23% and
16% of the seafood the inputs from all
the countries including Indonesia
Vietnam and Ecuador constituted
one-third of the total annual seafood
imports here I started with the linker
in regard to in regard to the
geographical split it shows what this
paragraph is about and it helps to
smoothly transition between paragraphs
that's important then they talk about
the three largest importers that's
what's important to describe the biggest
changes are the highest numbers but in
our case we only have six countries on
the chart so I named the smaller three
importers late in this paragraph but
sometimes you may get a chart with ten
countries
you're not gonna name all ten countries
in your essay you shouldn't only select
the largest in our case of the largest
importers I've heard that some people
say you should select three largest
importers and three smallest importers
but whoever talks about the smallest
importers or the smallest producers only
talk about the biggest most important
figures what about a conclusion there
must be no conclusion in your task one
essay you may write your overview after
the body paragraphs if you wish but
there must be no conclusion they say say
is 192 words long and beetle the long
side ain't right 170 hundred 80 words in
your essay and definitely not more than
200 but actually what do you find more
challenging iö essays too long or too
short tell me in comments I've also
prepared for you the PDF will the sample
answer which you can download and I have
a similar video for the task 2 essay I'm
gonna give you links in just a second in
this video I showed you the sample
answer and mentioned some of the
important things in this essay I also
have an online course in which you can
learn how to write band 7 essays
yourself for each type of task you will
learn how to select information for your
body paragraphs what to write about in
your body paragraph
that's something we haven't touched on
today how to paraphrase how to get a
highest call for your vocabulary a ward
verb tenses to use in your essays or how
to use the passive voice in your task
one essay you'll also get a sample
answer for each type of task with a
detailed description of how each essay
was written it's a paid course and I'm
gonna link it in the corner and in the
video description box below please go
and check it out
I think it will be really useful for you
basically all the resources I've
mentioned in this video are gonna be
linked in the video description box
below don't forget to download the PDF
with the sample essay and what's the
video about a sample task 2 essay one
last question
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watching me good luck Bobby
